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corina dragomir
[03.Jun.05 21:47]
the poem lacks an overall plan, originality, open or encased message. the author (poetaster!) resorts to imagery that has been so overused throughout the centuries it has become trite and hackneyed. unfortunately, lingual idleness makes it impossible for me to figure out what reason it was written for. I make no bones about its awfulness, pointlessness etc. in addition to this, feather-touch emotional sensitivity, the connoisseur's sense of language, a keen interest in gesture and affect, they're all here in spades. the text has achieved memorable badness. this is pretty much nothing but a bunch of cliches set to rhyme.

a mix of exact and off-rhymes:

moon, return (off-rhyme)
clue, blue (exact-rhyme)
flood, stood (off-rhyme)
spleen, green (exact-rhyme)

P.S. i'm waiting to read more in order to have a clear picture of your writing skills, creativity and evolution on the site.

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= .	corina dragomir [03.Jun.05 21:47]
the poem lacks an overall plan, originality, open or encased message. the author (poetaster!) resorts to imagery that has been so overused throughout the centuries it has become trite and hackneyed. unfortunately, lingual idleness makes it impossible for me to figure out what reason it was written for. I make no bones about its awfulness, pointlessness etc. in addition to this, feather-touch emotional sensitivity, the connoisseur's sense of language, a keen interest in gesture and affect, they're all here in spades. the text has achieved memorable badness. this is pretty much nothing but a bunch of cliches set to rhyme. a mix of exact and off-rhymes: moon, return (off-rhyme) clue, blue (exact-rhyme) flood, stood (off-rhyme) spleen, green (exact-rhyme) P.S. i'm waiting to read more in order to have a clear picture of your writing skills, creativity and evolution on the site.