| = Impact | Edilberto González Trejos [05.Jun.05 18:24] |
| This poem impacts the reader greatly!!! I felt the impact. Excellent use of vocabulary & images (metaphores)... Best to you | |
| = very weird fragrance | Vasilescu Alvin Bastian [06.Jun.05 15:29] |
| Yes, the impact is great, like Edilberto said... Good connection between the natural and the unnatural... Besides this, the poem does also posses a very weird fragrance...of hidden. Good luck to you... ...Bastian... | |
| = :) thanks | Breazu Roxana Eugenia [07.Jun.05 17:29] |
| i myself like this poem...and it is weird even to me...i wrote it for a friend of mine, due to what she felt for someone else... bastian, if it weren't for the bac exam, we would talk, but i'm just so stressed out by this...i don't know what to say... i am a baudelaire's fan...the workshop...well...troubles again...and honestly, the poem was harmless... edilberto, thanks for the support...once i get the time,( i have some exams, especially maths that i really hate...as a poet) :)) but then...i will look through your works too... all the best to both of you... Roxana | |
| = you're for the bac exam too?? | Vasilescu Alvin Bastian [08.Jun.05 13:17] |
| Wow...This is really weird...We have too many things in common. So...you're for the bac exam too...Good luck! You'll need it as I will.... | |
| = and about maths... | Vasilescu Alvin Bastian [08.Jun.05 13:21] |
| And I forgot something: Everybody hates maths!!!! I'm against it 100%... Best wishes! ...Bastian... | |
| = same to you | Breazu Roxana Eugenia [08.Jun.05 13:51] |
| wow...I am so happy I got 50 whatever...are those like points or what...anyhow...yeah...we've got a lot in common...goodness, i wish I had more time for art...but, unfortunately...this is how it is... I wish you good luck too!! Roxana | |
| = 50...representing your acces level | Vasilescu Alvin Bastian [08.Jun.05 13:57] |
| it's your acces level...it gaves you some advantages... now I don't think some of you're text will visit the workshop again... you can post your poems and comments directly, without being checked by an editor... all the best! | |
| = that's good | Breazu Roxana Eugenia [08.Jun.05 14:02] |
| oh...you gave me such a good news...i hope i won't see the workshop again...:))) Roxana | |
| = passing by | raj thampi [08.Jun.05 17:00] |
| "Bear" (Did you mean beer?) sweet scented funeral cloth (As the entire idea is about the funeral cloth with the sweet fragrance of "something", I assume you wanted to say "beer") The fragrance is his, the kisses he laid, Yet distance carves heart with a moth (again mouth or moth?-distance between heart and the mouth-this is what you meant right?) My life which he cuddled in grave… | |
| = explanation | Breazu Roxana Eugenia [08.Jun.05 17:10] |
| nope...this time it is moth all right...as i the fly...because, as you know, the moth eats things like wood and clothes and other things...so i ment moth because i wanted it to reflect something ragged. also, it is bear, which is to wear, to carry..."bear the sweet scented..." | |
| = thanks | raj thampi [08.Jun.05 17:51] |
| Oops :D Ummm I think I read it in wrong order. Thanks for the explanation Roxana. I think I have to read more attentive next time. | |
| = exams | Edilberto González Trejos [09.Jun.05 01:36] |
| Wish you the best at your exam!!! All I have to tell you is "write on" :o) Best to you SONGO | |