| = Marius|
Corina Gina Papouis
|a rich text, complex meanings and self analysis: its like looking in the mirror while trying to operate on your brain :)or something like that.|
i liked the detail: the force-fed jingle/ the candy candle induces the reader into that trance, that obsessiveness that pollutes the mind.
healing is the only way:)
| = errr|
Corina Gina Papouis
|I think I meant Dan, although I am never sure...:)|
| = .|
|I don't know but looks like you change your style, bringing more lyricism. As well I observe the attention for details, and the dilution of reality, of senses.|
|+ "now choke so gently"|
|it's something else - how you grab the feelings and drag them through the collage of your thoughts clear immediately to yourself yet intricate and spun through unusual things & ideas to finally crystallise them as poems. I really appreciate the lines arranged in a scenario frame or this may be just a personal way of seeing things.|
this poem is so visual - I can really imagine its scenes flowing like the images of a good movie.
| = 2 in 1|
|you kneel and light the candy candle|
and talk me through my laughing ruin
wrapped [UP] in your force-fed jingle
consumed by your endless riddle
you will heal me
that's how I read your poem. the second one. did I mention I see two poems in one? ... a story of confession, becoming, the healing power of light (to me). sorry, I have this big flaw of taking things personally. :-) truly wonderful and well inspired.
| = ladies and gents|
|corina: it is indeed an insight of madness. it's obsessive but it has (an either ironic or) a happy ending :) |
marius: yes Sir, I like playing with words more than I did before. You did notice that. Thanks
Ion : it is visual, it could work as a script, it's also personal and it's written with a lot of love. for words and images. thanks
Sim: you know you're my favorite reader :) and yes, at some point I thought of erasing everything (but the second one)
| = rhythm|
| i appreciate especially the stacatto rhythm of a metal song well connected with the descent into madness.|
| = Madness? I'd rather say...|
John Willy Kopperud
|...the civilized mind's dependency upon stimulation, the longing for that "second wind", bringing those natural opiates forth.|
Really a nice piece, dan marius!
Cheers from Willy
| = constantin, willy|
|constantin : really liked what you saw there. there's a lot of music in my writing|
willy: always an honor. good interpretation. let's say "the descent into the madness of the civilized world & mind"
| = wonderland...|
Romulus Campan Maramuresanu
|Why am I so stirred by your gentle surrealism, yet so witty and edgy sometimes?|
„no life here, Sir/ you should try the strawberries”
absolutely visual, even though psychedelic, yet so kind…
The fine change in your detail-style is benefic.
Missed you (all)…
| = dan|
|welcome back. we missed you too.|