| = better | Constantin Delca [26.Jun.09 15:24] |
| it looks better and more 'readable' without the capital letters at the beginning of every line. maybe it's just me, but it's a bit annoying the repetition of 'cells'. cheers! | |
| = cold heart | Gunsel DJEMAL [26.Jun.09 17:55] |
| Thanks Constantin, you are right. I've done the amendment. Cheers!:):) | |
| = advice | Diana Todea [27.Jun.09 16:12] |
| Nice poem, Gunsel. However, I have a remark about using too much of "and" in such a short poem; it gives a prosaic aspect to it. I don't think so many instances of "and" are necessary. And overall the poem is soapy and lacks originality (is just like seeing American love declarations on TV again). Anyway, this is just my opinion. Cheers! | |
| = your opinion | Gunsel DJEMAL [27.Jun.09 19:56] |
| Dear Diana, thank yu for your advice. I do not get offended always treasure the comments and the advice's given to me. Thanks again. I have got rid of the "and". You are right. Cheers! | |