| = about games | Corina Gina Papouis [03.Oct.09 15:46] |
| i enjoyed the playful tone used here but i guess there is not enough flawlessness in the text, the 'let's play that game' becomes tiring at the end of..the game:) also attention should be paid to rhymes and their rhythm. so, in my opinion I believe it needs a little bit more polishing. regards, Corina | |