| = is | Corina Gina Papouis [11.Mar.10 20:25] |
| a story-telling-poem (aren't they all:)), however, the shape needs slightly more work, some words may go...what I am trying to say is that some de-cluttering is needed to make it shine..and right at the beginning it would be good to consider: 'you'd never look back..'. i liked the ending! cheers, Corina | |
| = Corina | Ela Solan [12.Mar.10 11:12] |
| Thank you for comment, I made few changes... this is also an exercise for my English... Elsa | |