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Cãtãrãu Alina - Andreea
|I think that the first part needs some changes or at least polishing, because it doesn't seem so poetical, but I really liked the second stanza. It captures the essence of the entire poem. In my point of view, you should leave only these stanza:|
"Across battlefields of regretful words
And hurtful memories
Striking like sharp daggers
Practising the devil's theories."
Oh, and practising is not grammatically correct. It's practicing.
| = response|
|ok.thanks.I took your advice under consideration|
| = thanks|
|thanks.sometimes I forget the obvious mistakes.|
I took your advice and changed it
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|Ioana, please write the answer only once, because it remains in the list of comments to be approved by the editor. so, it doesn't disappear.|