| = My opinion | Cãtãrãu Alina - Andreea [21.Jul.10 21:08] |
| I think that the first part needs some changes or at least polishing, because it doesn't seem so poetical, but I really liked the second stanza. It captures the essence of the entire poem. In my point of view, you should leave only these stanza: "Across battlefields of regretful words And hurtful memories Striking like sharp daggers Practising the devil's theories." Oh, and practising is not grammatically correct. It's practicing. Cheers! | |
| = response | nica ioana [22.Jul.10 09:24] |
| ok.thanks.I took your advice under consideration | |
| = thanks | nica ioana [22.Jul.10 09:24] |
| thanks.sometimes I forget the obvious mistakes. I took your advice and changed it | |
| = . | Veronica Valeanu [22.Jul.10 09:26] |
| Ioana, please write the answer only once, because it remains in the list of comments to be approved by the editor. so, it doesn't disappear. | |