| = killed|
|i think there are too many cliches: [my heart is burning,mysterious feeling] but also as leitmotifs (rain, soul's quest for love, lost love). these have been used millions of times before.|
the voice has no strength, it only extols the helplessness.
| = To Veronica Valeanu|
|I know that it is not a so good poem...It is made in a moment of lack of inspiration.. But then, I felt that I have to write something. And after I finished, I thought that it would be well if somebody tells me an opinion or gives an advice. |
Thank you for telling me. I will rectify some parts of it in a moment of more inspiration.
| = Edited|
|I rectified some parts of this poetry. I hope that it is a little better.|