= is... | Corina Gina Papouis [14.Aug.10 11:47] |
I surprise myself and my todays are leaking. liked the idea of 'thought in thought'...explore it a bit deeper! cheers! | |
= First- | John Willy Kopperud [14.Aug.10 17:45] |
-you need something before "leaf", namely "a" or "the." Second; I can't make sense of the line: "Like a falling water to it's spring." Did you wish to express something like: "Like the falling water in a fountain." ? Just a suggestion. Please make the necessary clarifications! Cheers from Willy | |
= ! | Corina Gina Papouis [09.Nov.10 20:02] |
please review above suggestions, so the poem can make sense. | |