| = welcome new member | Veronica Valeanu [21.Nov.10 12:20] |
| quite a courageous poem. it denotes an analytic thinking, mingled with doses of affection and self-renouncement. I would like to encourage you to try envisaging in every line a bigger amount of clusters of words related to the message you want to convey, not only sequences of words that belong to a single image or idea. - (But not here.) I think that the end is not so necessary. keep writing. regards, V. | |