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Veronica Valeanu
[07.Jan.11 10:17]
pressurized :)

try this:[there]instead of [it]was time for death
-it doesn't double up the effect of [it was time for bed]-

 =  I see your point, Veronica
John Willy Kopperud
[07.Jan.11 10:17]
-thank you very much!
Cheers from Willy

+ think today is bad? try yesterday!
ion a
[07.Jan.11 19:42]
liked it too, all people nostalgic over the terrible old days would go crazy within a month if they could live that, with no running water, no electricity, no entertainment, bed bugs and fleas, epidemics, etc
i don't know, the last verse might be a little superfluous, the irony is already plainly visible in the rest of the poem


 =  Thanks a lot for your appreciation, ion-
John Willy Kopperud
[08.Jan.11 13:12]
-I do think you may be right regarding the last couple of lines. I will look the poem over during the weekend.
Cheers from Willy

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