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 =  said, with meaning
Lynn West
[14.Feb.11 06:10]
A moving image of love...

 =  Dan Marius
Luminita Suse
[01.Mar.11 15:23]
I liked the sense of drama, the implicit and explicit line breaks and the imagery in your poem... To avoid clichees I would remove one word: lovers.

so please break/ perfect couple
the stark
dismembered/ beauty

Also, the shift adjective-to-noun: "the stark"
And the rhythm...

 =  hey there
dan marius
[03.Mar.11 16:07]
thanks. don't think I'll remove "lovers" though.. although your "version" sounds better. yes well in the end lovers remove themselves :)

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