| = 10 | Veronica Vãleanu [25.Nov.11 17:32] |
| Bogdan, I appreciate you for having the courage to write such a text. It is dense, and so bold in making the boundaries between life, consciousness projected along it, death, and the awareness of being suspended somewhere in the middle of everything. that's why I have decided to raise your membership level to 10. You will certainly go from now on very quickly to 50,it's only a matter of time. I still need to draw your attention to some aspects: your fluency is excellent, it's obvious that you you have a good command of the language and its traps. Yet, I took the liberty of correcting many grammar mistakes directly on the text. If I had made only a list of the mistakes, you wouldn't have had the patience to correct them (it's not the first time). e.g. doesn't belonged/seemed/etc. for the simple aspect of Present, the vb is in the 1st form: [doesn't belong/seem]. only for the passive voice the vb is in the 3d form: [is told/considered] another one: for the past simple negative, the vb is in the 1st form [didn't know} not [didn't knew]. only past s. affirm. is in the 2nd form (knew). the passive voice requires the 3rd vb form: [wasn't known] another mistake typical with you is this one: [which it was recreated} - eliminate that [it], because [which] is already a subject for the vb. Well, I made these corrections for you, because I appreciated your work. I hope you won't mind. Keep on writing and posting texts. I can feel that here on your page is only the tip of the iceberg. Best regards, Veronica | |
| = Thank you | Bogdan Cristian Blascioc [25.Nov.11 18:27] |
| Thank you for your words, for upgrading my level as member of agoniarobot and, maybe in the first place, for your grammatical corrections. I'll try to do my best in the future and become a higher member of your selected literary club! | |