| = No Rhyme | James A Williams [14.Jan.12 14:47] |
| Try it without rhyming | |
| = throw the ballast | ion a [15.Jan.12 04:53] |
| i think James is right, right now rhyme and fixed form are just constraints for you, many other versions you could try, like: flip over when the page is done don't start using water to engrave a face you only need to embrace its shadow take your time | |
| = Thank you very much for your precious piece of advice, however I am afraid I am | mia isabela deleanu [15.Jan.12 11:42] |
| Thank you very much for your precious piece of advice, however I am afraid I am a prisoner of the rhyme :) | |
| = James | James A Williams [15.Jan.12 12:11] |
| Free youself! | |