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Very interesting text, rather a philosophical thought than poetry, but leave it please as poetry.
The real problems though are the several typos, so please do a thorough spell-check and repost. I'll gladly consider it after!
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|I have a small problem, I feel better in classical poetry even though my work is not very good. When I start the free verse somehow I become philosofical. It is nonetheless an exercise.|
| = still there...|
|Still lots of typos...|
| = choices...|
|I do understand both your concern and your point of view. Nevertheless, I have to say that there's a significant qualitative difference in favour of your free verse text, which should encourage you to spend time in refining through more writing:-)|
Of course, the choice is yours, but it would be a loss not to try more free verse besides the classical ones:-)
Just an "old man's" advice...
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I particularly noticed "and an incredible long list sees the break of day.", an interesting, stern, nevertheless exquisite sentence...
Changed "man" to "men" as required by "are". Hope you don't mind:-)
We've had quite a good cooperation today, isn't it! I truly enjoyed it!
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|I enjoyed it, too. I will make the correction. Kindly, gg.|