|some minor suggestions:|
[some may never see]instead of [can]
[half-asleep] instead of [sleepy like that]
I appreciate your decision of translating one of the texts written by Manuela Macelaru and the quality of this text.
| = Thank you|
Alina Maria Ivan
|Thank you for your appreciation, your suggestions are welcome. I translate poems that mean something to me and I feel that a poem becomes another entity in a different language, as beautiful as the original.|