| = Hi Florentina | Corina Gina Papouis [28.Nov.13 22:30] |
| Welcome to Agonia! :) I believe your text is more of a personal nature, appears more like a blog story, which is not necessarily bad, it seems quite genuine, but more of a different kind of text we would post on a front page. Please revise it for now and check some of your grammar (i.e 'That we listen so many times' > That we listened to so many times) try to get maybe the essence (give some/ leave some)of it and let's take it from there. Kind regards! Corina | |