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Corina Gina Papouis
[04.Dec.13 18:49]
I enjoyed the mood of this poem and hope the woolly sweaters will keep your poetry snowing, snowing, snowing.

two small suggestions: woolly? (instead of wool) and get rid of that in the last stanza, for better flow.

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Kind regards!
C

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Gabriel Nicolae Mihãilã
[07.Dec.13 23:56]
i agree with both suggestions and i'll chage the second one
but on the first one i guess i want to preserve the traditional note, woolly will sound more like silky warmy and that is just a part of what i intented, most of the woolly sweaters made these days are not genuine
best regards




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