| + Willy, here is | Veronica Vãleanu [20.Dec.13 16:25] |
| one of those jewels of yours. I prefer to remain silent when the text speaks by itself. VV | |
| = superb | ion a [02.Jan.14 13:10] |
| congrats Willy and happy holidays everybody! if you read it aloud, your version sounds better, but shouldn't be "one more eternity"? | |
| + yes. | dan marius [06.Jan.14 18:14] |
| no need to say more. | |
| = Veronica, Ion, Dan Marius: | John Willy Kopperud [07.Jan.14 12:25] |
| Thank you so much for your generous responses and a happy New Year to each and all of you! Cheers from Willy | |
| = Ion.. | John Willy Kopperud [07.Jan.14 12:30] |
| I'm a bit unsure whether it's grammatically incorrect to place "more" as the last word in the line as I did. The reason why I did so might be that I enjoyed the sound of it. Cheers from Willy | |
| = one eternity more | raj thampi [08.Jan.14 22:21] |
| I don't know grammar, but I did like the way it sounds John :) "one eternity more" | |
| = your grammar is better | ion a [10.Jan.14 17:21] |
| i'm not a grammar expert either, just tried something like "one more thing" vs "one thing more", but this is a very good poem and this particular license is probably part of its charm | |