| = great job. | Christopher Thripp [05.Apr.08 04:14] |
| very expressive marius fine take ... | |
| = simply expressive | Joshua Vasquez Butawan [06.Apr.08 15:08] |
| I love the music so much, great expression, so lively and dashing to my very sense when music explodes my mind gets crazy, U made me feel the great feeling on how u give a very intense tribute to the music which u loved also | |
| = A valid musicality in your poem here, Marius... | John Willy Kopperud [06.Apr.08 21:22] |
...but I think the following is a bit ortographically flawed and needs a bit of correction: no word’s expressions but flew on the river One suggestion might be: no verbal expression but flight on the river You may come up with something better and that would really please my, cause this IS indeed a good poem all other lines taken into consideration! Hope you don't mind me being tedious! Apart from the questionable words you master the english language on a high level here, Marius! Cheers from Willy | |
| = Thank you all for your helpful comments... | Marius Surleac [07.Apr.08 09:41] |
| Thank you all for your comments, Joshua, Chris and Willy. Indeed Willy you were right about but I didn't know what would be more right to that two stanzas and thank you for your suggestion. I have made the correction you suggested and hope that now is ok. Thank you very much for your help. I really appreciate your advices Willy. Cheers to you all and have a nice day! | |
| = nor feelings but inner proofs… | Ada Ionescu [28.Oct.08 20:41] |
| Strenuous, vivid, ardent poetry. | |
| = thank you Ada! | Marius Surleac [28.Oct.08 21:05] |
| You have a sharp eye Ada - indeed "nor feelings but inner proofs" is exactly the core of the poem and of what I felt. Thank you very much and I am glad you liked it! Cheers, Marius | |