| = great job.|
|very expressive marius fine take ...|
| = simply expressive|
Joshua Vasquez Butawan
|I love the music so much, great expression, so lively and dashing to my very sense when music explodes my mind gets crazy, U made me feel the great feeling on how u give a very intense tribute to the music which u loved also|
| = A valid musicality in your poem here, Marius...|
John Willy Kopperud
...but I think the following is a bit ortographically flawed and needs a bit of correction:
no word’s expressions
but flew on the river
One suggestion might be:
no verbal expression
but flight on the river
You may come up with something better and that would really please my, cause this IS indeed a good poem all other lines taken into consideration!
Hope you don't mind me being tedious! Apart from the questionable words you master the english language on a high level here, Marius!
Cheers from Willy
| = Thank you all for your helpful comments...|
|Thank you all for your comments, Joshua, Chris and Willy.|
Indeed Willy you were right about but I didn't know what would be more right to that two stanzas and thank you for your suggestion.
I have made the correction you suggested and hope that now is ok.
Thank you very much for your help. I really appreciate your advices Willy.
Cheers to you all and have a nice day!
| = nor feelings but inner proofs…|
|Strenuous, vivid, ardent poetry. |
| = thank you Ada!|
|You have a sharp eye Ada - indeed "nor feelings but inner proofs" is exactly the core of the poem and of what I felt. Thank you very much and I am glad you liked it!|