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 =  resting...
Marius Surleac
[12.May.08 12:50]
There is a kind of fragmentation governed by the alliteration you used which gives musicality to the poem; mind resting over the interminable matter.
Good job!

 =  Thank you Marius!
Irene Singleton
[12.May.08 13:09]
Thank you for your kind words -life is constantly switching between activity and resting, recharging the batteries is what keeps us vibrant! Thanks again.

 =  sparkles.
Christopher Thripp
[13.May.08 07:58]
great words irene keep it flowing..

 =  Written with a sense of humor...
John Willy Kopperud
[13.May.08 11:26]
...that I sincerely welcome on this site where laughter may be scarce. The quality of your alliterations is already pointed out by Marius. I have but one little complaint; ORGANIC ORGANS in your third last line. A reader MIGHT end up wondering what materials your other organs are made of.
In all other respects; a poem to my amusement and enjoyment!
Cheers from Willy

 =  Laughter is the best medicine...
Irene Singleton
[13.May.08 12:55]
Thank you for your appreciation Willy - laughter is good - its better to smile than to frown, saves on wrinkles and releases feel-good endorphines. :))

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