= resting... | Marius Surleac [12.May.08 12:50] |
There is a kind of fragmentation governed by the alliteration you used which gives musicality to the poem; mind resting over the interminable matter. Good job! | |
= Thank you Marius! | Irene Singleton [12.May.08 13:09] |
Thank you for your kind words -life is constantly switching between activity and resting, recharging the batteries is what keeps us vibrant! Thanks again. | |
= sparkles. | Christopher Thripp [13.May.08 07:58] |
great words irene keep it flowing.. | |
= Written with a sense of humor... | John Willy Kopperud [13.May.08 11:26] |
...that I sincerely welcome on this site where laughter may be scarce. The quality of your alliterations is already pointed out by Marius. I have but one little complaint; ORGANIC ORGANS in your third last line. A reader MIGHT end up wondering what materials your other organs are made of. In all other respects; a poem to my amusement and enjoyment! Cheers from Willy | |
= Laughter is the best medicine... | Irene Singleton [13.May.08 12:55] |
Thank you for your appreciation Willy - laughter is good - its better to smile than to frown, saves on wrinkles and releases feel-good endorphines. :)) | |