| = Do you remember? | Bogdan G. Marin [20.May.08 13:35] |
| Romantic poem I might say. I forever wonder: what if Beethoven would have written poetry? - of all composers Beethoven is most close to my heart. What power! What effervescent sorrow and love in his compositions! what power could have been in a poetry? I enjoyed: "and leave in my body,/a forceful disease" - I like the tone at the end as well. But I think that the poem could have been more powerfull if you would have had a more painful, harsh -- sublime tone, a tone similiarly to the tone of a tornado!! Or a thunderstorm!! | |
| = particularity... | Marius Surleac [20.May.08 14:30] |
| What if Beethoven would have written poetry? - who knows, maybe he could be spectacular or not. What about my poem I am glad that you like it; but can't be more painful or quite aggressive, because for me (when I wrote it) it was like when a sensation of inner peace invaded my whole body and also it can't be as you said because of the particularity of the season ... each season has its specificities. Thank you very much Bogdan. Cheers from Marius! | |
| = This poem is balanced... | John Willy Kopperud [20.May.08 21:22] |
| ...due to the polarity between the two words in the first line; beautiful and virus. In addition to that; the image of the arrows in the heart...and finally a forceful disease. Sweetness here is nurtured by spring, flowers, sun and trees; elements that sum up an aspect of natural romanticism. The very duality of this poem constitutes it's strength! And let me add, Marius, your grammar and syntax has gone through a rapid improvement. Cheers from Willy | |
| = Thank you Willy, I appreciate... | Marius Surleac [20.May.08 22:54] |
| Thanks Willy! True you said right here and you have a well developed sharp eye for the main ideas of the texts. In fact you've pointed very well what I wanted to say with this poem; as I said to Bogdan before - I felt a relaxing inner peace when I wrote it, maybe because of the spring appearance and the flower's opening, using the sun light energy through photosynthesis and making the communion with nature. Thank you very much for your comment Willy! Cheers my friend! | |