| = powerful and deeply | Marius Surleac [15.Jun.08 12:01] |
| The imagery is well used; this is more than a poem, is a deep thought, a deep meditation - in the empty world, "you" is to be found. But raven signifies something else, the eyes of a raven mean "memory" (as in the Hugin and Munin - Odin's ravens) - maybe here is a reverse memory deeply sank. Though I have to make few observations: I think that there is “raven look alone” instead of “looks” and “an empty” instead of “a empty”. Sincerely, Marius | |
| = intuitive mr surleac. | Christopher Thripp [15.Jun.08 22:13] |
| marius your absolutely correct... either we think the same or you almost definately know where i am coming from ........thank you marius. | |
| = Concise and well-shaped, Chris! | John Willy Kopperud [16.Jun.08 10:12] |
| Just be sure that you change the A to AN in the third line. AN is what you put before a pronounced wovel sound. Cheers from Willy | |
| = thanks | Christopher Thripp [17.Jun.08 08:25] |
| a an it is thanks willy. | |