| = The reason why you should revise this, Ionut... | John Willy Kopperud [15.Jun.08 19:33] |
| ...is the fifth line. Grammatically BINDED is too bad to appear here. The past tense of the word is BOUND. I'm sure you can figure something out that still keeps the count on ten syllables per line! Otherwise: I enjoy your classical way of writing and the imagery is rich as usual. Now I look forward to your revision! Cheers from Willy | |
| = Absolutely a valid solution... | John Willy Kopperud [16.Jun.08 10:06] |
| ...and another precisely rhymed poem with good images from you, Ionut! Cheers from Willy | |
| = Willy, | Ionut Popa [16.Jun.08 10:13] |
| Thanks for your attention. Cheers! | |
| = congratulations... | Marius Surleac [16.Jun.08 11:03] |
| As Willy mentioned above, your poems strike one more time. The rhyme and rhythm are well used, the imagery is addictive. P.S. - From now on you'll be able to post comments by your own! Best Wishes, Marius | |