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 =  oh my
Mike Aspros
[07.Aug.08 06:34]
this tugs at my heart. i like the situation and metaphors you used. They're appealing to a broad range of people. The use of periods was distracting to me otherwise It was an enjoyable read.

 =  congratulations!
Marius Surleac
[07.Aug.08 12:06]
This is an excellent peaceful text, great illustrations and reality may sometimes bring us in front of such wonderful moments. I see that you've improved the quality of your texts and this is the greatest proof.

Congrats!

Best wishes,
Marius

 =  re: perspectives
Corina Gina Papouis
[07.Aug.08 21:38]
Great poem! Would have loved to provide a star! "Life-at-the-cinema" kind of poem. Well done!
Cheers!
Corina

 =  yes
Ecaterina Bargan
[07.Aug.08 21:39]
i think this poetry is just perfect. i read today in romanian somenthig about the open door of my apartment and heart, in this summer days.

i love zhis parts:

"Pain
When you're eighteen
and she loves you not"

"Sleep
when rest becomes a green place
with trees and grass
and nephews forgetting to visit

Me, beside you
always a shadow or thought
but never really there
because of a door you chose to close
one summer day"

all poetry is good. i would like to do such an experiment.

heartfelt,

ec

 =  Congratulations!
John Willy Kopperud
[10.Aug.08 11:51]
A very well composed poem where you reveal the crucial point in the last stanza. It comes as a natural "last station." Wonderful!
Cheers from Willy




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