| = Fine and intersting work. though I find some grammaticl flaws... | John Willy Kopperud [17.Aug.08 11:18] |
| ...I suggest that you revise them like this: If one has a heart One has music if one has a heart it follows that one has rhythm if one has rhythm it follows that one has music if one has music it follows that the heart is an instrument. The ocarina is an instrument it follows that the heart is an ocarina. If the heart is an ocarina It follows That the heart sings. Cheers from Willy | |
| = niceee | Marius Surleac [17.Aug.08 19:59] |
| This is a nice experiment and a lesson of Logic. Interesting though! Best wishes, Marius | |
| = John and Marius | Maria-Mihaela Pop [18.Aug.08 09:07] |
| Thank you both for your nice words on this experiment! Initially the nouns were not articulated in the poem because I wanted to convey the rigidity of a syllogism. However, at John’s suggestion (which was most welcome) I modified the text. I believe that this second version works with rather than against the rhythm of the poem and makes it less sterile in spite of its logical associations. Best wishes to you too Mihaela | |