| = my opinion! | Marius Surleac [03.Oct.08 23:12] |
| Here is the same as for my previous comment. You can change the title with the subtitle, because this is a short poem that respects the canon 5-7-5. Though I think that you can improve its poetic shape - it looks wiped out! Sincerely, Marius | |
| = So? | Edgar A. Baguio [04.Oct.08 10:06] |
| So, what's wrong with its subtitle? Excuse me, I may be new here but I've been writing since you were not born yet. In fact most of your poems are like broken prose and non of them are in "workshop". Ok, just my opinion and mine matters because I am a Professor of Literature for years and years. Got it? | |
| = answer | Marius Surleac [04.Oct.08 10:26] |
| Is nothing wrong with the subtitle - what I said is that you can put the subtitle as title, because is not haiku. About the other thing, you have done different presumptions about me - I think you should revise this behaviour because I haven't talked about you like that and I don't deserve this behaviour of yours. Answers: I am not interested that you've started to write before I was born. What is the idea? Do you think that if I am younger I am stupid than you, or what do you want to say? About my poems, I think that you haven't understood anything from them. If you'll read them carefully you'll see something else! So, if I am not a literature professor, my opinion doesn't matters? I am sorry to tell you that if you're thinking like that for your age I feel pity for you. I will keep the opinion about your poems, only for myself. I will follow others' opinion and from what I have seen, somebody else observed well the quality of your texts. Regarding this poem, this is not a haiku and probably you know better than I - because you're a literature professor. P.S. I suggest you to stop with your rude words about me - is not about my work here, but yours. Thank you! Marius. | |
| = And so? | Edgar A. Baguio [04.Oct.08 17:32] |
| Bla! bla! bla! So, what's your concept of a haiku since you are so determined to define it your own way. Isn't it about nature and its beauty? Or at least a simple description of something in nature? Take it easy kid. You know you are right, all the time, right? | |
| = ! | Marius Surleac [04.Oct.08 17:42] |
| Ok! To end all here - I am not defining my own way. I would say just this: your poem has only two elements from a haiku. I'm stopping here with you. You'll accept the critics of the other users. Also, you don't know how to accept critics and I am sorry you act like that. Be happy and wish a lot of achievements. I'm done here - I don't want to have something else to do with you from now on. | |
| = pay attention please! | Marius Surleac [05.Oct.08 10:08] |
| Edgar, I suggest you to stop with the insults. Your comments are not deleted but need to be approved - so wait for an editor to approve your texts and comments. Also, the stars can be given by the members of the site with a certain level. Here is no dictatorship, and if you would think before speaking would be better. So do not act like a child. If you are a professor I expect for more from you, I expect more wisdom. Thank you! | |