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John Willy Kopperud
|First: so much dynamite OR so man dynamite BARS.|
(I used tha last dynamite BAR)
And I think you want to express that you
TOOK THE SHOCK WAVE ALL ALONE.
Cut out THAT I TOOK prior to all the way to drunkenness.Again;
dynamite, or a dynamite BAR, gave birth to her.
TEARS her away
Lastly: The last dynamite BAR
strongly sweeps her away.
If you accomplish these changes, we'll see about the approving of the text.
Cheers from Willy
| = see you next time, Thanks|
Ioana Camelia Popa
|You mean "dynamite BARS" as "a piece of dynamite"... I don`t mean the shock wave, but the shroud wave, or the veil... it will remain veil, and I will change the topic, where I could`ve done better...|