| = A very good idea... | John Willy Kopperud [14.Nov.08 10:09] |
| ...though the grammar, syntax and rhythm here should be much better. Your idea deserves that. I have taken the liberty of presenting you with a ready revised poem, hopefully respecting the original idea: ________________________________________________________ The Fun of Angling The national sport of England may seem boring for many, even among those who are inclined to like ut. By Jove, these fish are canny! Those who don't like angling may never have been to the water Or, even if so, they may just have found a fish caught by an otter. Those who did enjoy the waterside must necessarily have been there. Failing to catch any fish, however, they returned bored to their party. Well, angling is not that easy You have to learn all its ins and outs; study the nature of fish and waters; in still waters you don't find trouts. Then you ought to have the right gadgets, the right hook, the right line, the right fly. Sometimes to snare a squid or a cuttle fish You may have to sing, dance or cry! Come on, let's all go fishing; We'll have fish for dinner tonight But though we're going fishing No one is going to fight ! | |
| = thanks,John. | mazHur [21.Feb.09 19:04] |
| thank you, John, for your valued comments and improvements on the poem. | |