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 =  Please, drop "the" at the beginning of your last line ...
John Willy Kopperud
[15.Nov.08 18:45]
...the contour of patience is sufficient AND correct. Having said that, I like your idea here, it's original and it will like good once you have made the correction!
Cheers from Willy

 =  Still I read "the" patience. It's not proper English ...
John Willy Kopperud
[17.Nov.08 09:58]
...and it has no place in an otherwise good poem.
Cheers from Willy

 =  That's better!
John Willy Kopperud
[19.Nov.08 09:20]
It does look better without the odd error, doesn't it? Thank
you for revising.
Cheers from Willy

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