| = good poem, sounds like a ballad | Simona Sumanaru [05.Jan.09 16:02] |
| I'd put "poet of the rotten pillows" as the title and get rid of the repetition. Is it "Night of personal illusions?" Good stuff. | |
| = Simona, | Ionut Popa [05.Jan.09 17:33] |
| I'm glad you liked my poem. It's "nigh" (nigh = alaturi). Cheers! | |
| = Ionut | Simona Sumanaru [06.Jan.09 10:21] |
| "nigh of" + noun doesn't sound right to me. i think you're missing a gerund here. also, i think a bit too archaic for the tone of the poem. anyway, good work; sounds like a song. cheers back! | |