| = another dan simmons fan? | ion a [24.Jan.09 08:38] |
| liked the last stanza (and particularly the last verse), it can almost be a stand-alone poem. i'm not sure the first two are the right introduction though: too many esoteric allusions, too hermetic a discourse. i think you should at least try to somehow bind semantically the first stanza to the last, kind of an arch-over meaning. p.s. thanks for your visit and comments | |
| = next to a dimension | Veronica Valeanu [02.Feb.09 10:55] |
| but i'm rather mythoclastic... and I thought i did that, considering that in grammar, the future has levels of perception: when somebody projects it, pulling it from a past frame of expectation it becomes future-in-the-past, when he has expectations about how things are going to work out before getting to the next dimension, it becomes future perfect. and "it-was-to-be" is a chimera, an in-between. Trojan is the capacity to project something subconsciously. all the best, Veronica | |