= patientscape | Veronica Valeanu [12.Feb.09 22:21] |
i felt like carressing the all-out, leathery smoothness of the poem... it is simply great! It's not the poet's surgery that captivated me - but rather the "patientscape" - as if this creature were forever ailing in its inner decantation mechanism applied to his own organs...being addicted to self-inflicting surgeries... - i would dare to suggest a little change: [the patient moves blue contraction * behold- the world breathes.] best regards, Veronica | |
= any tremor could kill the verse | Ada Ionescu [01.Mar.09 10:01] |
:). Nice! Regards, Ada. | |