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Marius Surleac
[24.Feb.09 21:49]
"Lord loves you" instead of "love you". Also you should pay attention to the rules regarding the punctuation marks in the sentence: the spaces before and after apostrophes, quotation marks; you should let spaces after commas and also you need to start the sentence with capital letters if you used them almost entirely; missing commas as well.

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Miu Sever
[02.Mar.09 10:10]
I've revised it once, hope it's ok. About "Lord loves you" : I checked it and it has been us native English speakers, for example here:

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John Willy Kopperud
[02.Mar.09 20:56]
...minor misspellings. What's more important is the fact that the story is funny and well told. I really enjoy reading about eccentric old ladies.
Cheers from Willy

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