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Corina Gina Papouis
[27.May.09 17:40]
Hi Sorin,
first things first:
'always' and 'happiness' are the correct forms of these 2 words.

come on!! : 'the time for a new "hello" with a new girl'...
think about it! would SHE really care if you'd put it that way??:)
try deeper, harder, be real!

...and this is just a hint, on top of my head:

and once again my lungs fill up with freedom
as your shadow slides perfectly
into the frame of the past
watching in silence
the beginning of my new chapter..

..or something like that..

oh, and do please try to get rid of the repetitions (i stopped counting how many times you used the word NEW)!
better luck next time!


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