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 =  your images - Cam
Edilberto González Trejos
[22.Jan.07 16:16]
surreal and ideal, a magnificent sucession of images and great poetry.



 =  ivory towers
John Willy Kopperud
[22.Jan.07 23:56]

I fully agree with Edilberto, Camelia. You see, this is what I'm talking about. A couple of minor language faults occur, but that's not enough to destroy this well-written poem. Your potential for improvement lies in some improvement of your English, and that I'm convinced you will

Greetings from Willy

 =  unreal
Heghedus Camelia
[23.Jan.07 08:12]
thank you, Songo, I’m glad to hear you again!
the ideal of the human being is to find his half, but it seems something that surpasses the reality



 =  disorder in my mind
Heghedus Camelia
[23.Jan.07 08:37]
Thank you, Willy, for your advice, your appreciation and for your trust in me. I made a few changes but in spite of that, I’m not sure that it is OK now.
Greetings from Cami

 =  ivory towers
John Willy Kopperud
[23.Jan.07 09:23]
Let's see:

Second stanza, second line : Drop the A immediately before ivy.
Third stanza, fourth line: Drop THE, immediately before HUMANKIND'S
Fourth stanza, third and fourth line (my suggestion):
drop THE immediately before LIFE, add HAS immediately
after. Add BEEN immediately before left behind, drop the
A before rain.

That's all and like I said, these small errors do not destroy the poem, but they are connected to the understanding of grammar and you might as well absorb it!

As Edilberto I love your images in this one, Camelia!
Cheers from Willy

 =  thousands
Heghedus Camelia
[23.Jan.07 11:09]
thousands thanks and a lot of gratitude


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