| = the... | Romulus Campan Maramuresanu [28.May.07 18:50] |
| for the humanity - I would remove "the", being useless here... Friendly. | |
| = Her horrible dark nipple | John Willy Kopperud [28.May.07 19:19] |
In addition to "the" before HUMANITY you should add an S to "kind" - (of forms.) Otherwise I enjoyed this poem. The theme is original. It deals with the embarrassing and the unpredictable. Often, as in this case, the result is an engaging and interesting poem. Greetings from Willy | |
| = yeap... | Romulus Campan Maramuresanu [28.May.07 23:48] |
| right Willy, old friend... success Andrei! | |