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ion amariutei
[18.Nov.03 22:31]
*I approve* sounds semantically disconnected from the rest of the poem, seems to be there just to complete the right number of syllables. just one of many possible versions could be:

The sun playing drums
- beams of light over my heart.
I smile contented.

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= one of many	ion amariutei [18.Nov.03 22:31]
I approve sounds semantically disconnected from the rest of the poem, seems to be there just to complete the right number of syllables. just one of many possible versions could be: The sun playing drums - beams of light over my heart. I smile contented.