| = Superb! | Axel Lenn [11.Nov.03 21:59] |
| That's what I call poetry... Keep writing, keep feeling | |
| + inmost | Anca Veronica Anghel [12.Nov.03 01:32] |
| the scent of roses two empty chairs and our rain :) Well, I like your version better. It is a translation ? When you write directly in English the poem has a different "feeling". | |
| = feed-back | Eugenia Buzatu [12.Nov.03 07:33] |
| no, it is not a translation. thanks for your feed-back warm regards Eugenia | |
| = Add more sylables:) | Iuliana Ungureanu [18.Nov.03 21:13] |
| Very nice, reminds me of that poem about the white chickens and the wheelbarrow (the name of the author escapes me). A sugestion though, haiku has a rythm of 5-7-5, in the second line you have only 4 sylables. | |
| = nice | ion amariutei [18.Nov.03 21:56] |
| very fragrant image, a still life with a curiously lingering human touch (empty chairs) i guess the last verse could simply be *in gentle raindrops* to appease the math sticklers :) | |