| = . | corina dragomir [08.Apr.05 20:28] |
| here's a different perspective. I tailored a warm coat out of your short&nice seasonal poem. (2 v/.) the soul gone with the leaves like hope rising another spring regarding your attempt to catch a glimpse of mind-body-nature with all its shapes, transitions, reactions, transformations etc., I think the word "autumn" should be left out or replaced with another word in order to create an indirect calling forth/stimulation of the reader's imagination. despite the haiku atmosphere, it expresses a similar setting and emotional significance as in a taiku or a tanka form. dara, is this a tanka or...some other japanese verse form? | |