| = too much and too little | ion amariutei [07.Oct.04 19:31] |
| *moment* appears 6 times in this poem. then we have *held my hand* followed by *holding hands* i think too little is happening here: a couple of people spent a moment holding hands and the world seemed perfect. but what else? what is there to make *us*, the readers, share that emotion? | |
| = Thanks for reading my poem | adriana iosub caras [09.Oct.04 19:54] |
| I'll take into consideration your opinions and I thank you. My interest was on the effect of alliteration and "to share hands" may create the feeling that the world could seem perfect, even if just for a moment. | |