| = micro/macro | corina dragomir [13.May.05 07:42] |
| the bond, although an unusual forfeit, is a serious matter, where appearance vs reality comes in the form of lies, deception and disguise:*like a microscopic fly/inside a megascopic glass/ of whisky./The whole fluid sinks/into my anatomy*. at the core of this poem, human’s incapability of grasping life is plainly roused, a fickle lay-out sprinkled with moth-balls, mostly patched by false projections. good poems indeed, mature poetic approach, powerful tone. I managed to read all texts you posted on agonia and I congratulate you for all of them. My favourite ones are those you wrote in french.:) I’d change the end by saying: Right on the edge Of your heart Inside our hopelessness. | |
| = Good points Corina | Edilberto González Trejos [14.May.05 06:02] |
| Dear Corina, Thanks for your comments. I wrote those verses when I was 19. There was a heavy existencialist load in me by then. However, I keep this text as a remarkable attempt to make poetry **sl** As for ending suggestion, it sounds good! You honour me when you write that you like my texts in French! :o) Feel free to translate them in our Sister Roman Language: ROMANIAN. Cheers, SONGO | |