| + for time is a mirror | ion amariutei [15.May.05 10:19] |
| just a few suggestions, concerned mostly with the *local flavor* of language :) *behind the mirror. he's bored too and lights up...* *dripping from his eyes to his boots with no clue for others.* *since two mornings past he's no longer surprised to see faces in clouds or even waxy ones hanging in squalid bars* *the whores wearing pink little skirts lusting next to their pint of beer* *he draws one last smoke from his imaginary cigarette then he gets rid of me* the last two verses are very strong, i couldn't refrain from improvising :) it takes a long time to understand time most of the time it takes your whole life then all that is left is an empty mask sometimes not even that | |
| = 9:30 or 9:35 | corina dragomir [16.May.05 09:37] |
| into your body your body stride Volhnin the stretcher-bearer and big-bellied Mihusia vermins – often kicking up a row one moment, one second it was over the work of a friend was complete for the not heard not fed not arranged not surviving not amassed tumor of not P.S asdf, all your suggestions were welcomed. (done) | |
| = Great :) | ioana dintica [27.Dec.08 18:39] |
| Very nice, a great captured moment :) Best regards, Ioana. | |