| = hammer | Laurenţiu Ion [15.Jun.09 10:46] |
| the end is like a hammer coup right in the middle of your head, something that seems unending, such as pain which crosses your entire body. I don't like that congestion of images, somewhere in the middle. under the cloven clay she chiseled in my spine rough fingers into strip mine I think you should release some lyrics from there it's a beautiful text that deserves & I hope you don't mind Cheers! | |
| = er | Laurenţiu Ion [15.Jun.09 11:00] |
| it deserve* | |
| = again | Laurenţiu Ion [15.Jun.09 11:04] |
| it deserves smth different :)) | |
| = . | Marius Surleac [15.Jun.09 21:53] |
| Now you can use html codes within your texts. Read the rules of the site and keep up the good way. Cheers! | |
| = my mood | Veronica Valeanu [15.Jun.09 22:12] |
| i feel this like a feather in my cap! for the record, i'm ready to give more and come through V.V. | |
| = Laurentiu | Veronica Valeanu [25.Oct.09 16:57] |
sorry, i remained with the impression that i had already answered yes using that part could have meant something melodramatic in opposition with the ending but it was a false track for the reader to become an accomplice later on maybe for fear they could be on Galatea's side (in fact she had been transformed into a woman only in answer to P's prayers) you know, a creator will always find reasons to take a distance from his creation (it could go both ways) | |