| = merry-go-round | Veronica Valeanu [02.Aug.09 15:06] |
| interesting passage :[silence(...)cri, cri,cri)- "a la francaise" correct here:[this life it's magic]and here [is humor at 100 degrees] skating, the echo of theater- all the traces produced by the magic machine. that trepidation makes me think about a stadium where the spectators acclaim a grandstand with their hands up like a wave an exercise for you linked to this merry-go-round theme: try thinking about this pair :stadium and amphitheater. V.V. | |
| = i don't understand | Diana Todea [02.Aug.09 20:41] |
| i don't understand where i have to correct. you suggested the same form that exists in the poem. | |
| = . | Veronica Valeanu [02.Aug.09 21:16] |
| [this life is magic]or [this life, its magic] [there's humor] or[humor is] | |
| = no mistake | Diana Todea [02.Aug.09 21:20] |
| i don't see any mistake in the expressions used. they can be accepted in a poem. thank you for appreciation and i'm glad you liked my poem. all the best! | |