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+ Rich images in this one-
John Willy Kopperud
[20.Sep.09 15:02]
-especially towards the end. I did enjoy it.
Cheers from Willy

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Corina Gina Papouis
[20.Sep.09 15:06]
nag from me: easily instead of easy!:)otherwise great imagery.

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Diana Todea
[20.Sep.09 20:49]
I rather suggest: the children (easily) lose it (easily) from their eyes. One of the 2 versions. At the end is not good. Nice poem. Cheers!

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Alice Diana Boboc
[21.Sep.09 13:04]

Willy: Thank you very much for your star!
Corina & Diana : Thank you for yours suggestion!
Cheers! Alice

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