| = there is a | Corina Gina Papouis [16.Nov.09 18:31] |
| ...problem with your rhymes and rhythm. the poem can do with some more polishing, too. I understand when people, love and feet could be placed under the umbrella of fetish, but in this one it did not trigger that kind of feeling at all. your verses do not hold much depth. so, maybe less feet... Regards, Corina | |