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= lyricism
Diana Todea
[04.Jan.10 21:50]
I think you poem lacks lyricism and is quite badly expressed. Although I can remark the medical terms and the tendency to "define" life in this perspective. Maybe a more "poetical" touch is needed here with some attention to the structure of the poem. Cheers, Diana!

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= lyricism	Diana Todea [04.Jan.10 21:50]
I think you poem lacks lyricism and is quite badly expressed. Although I can remark the medical terms and the tendency to "define" life in this perspective. Maybe a more "poetical" touch is needed here with some attention to the structure of the poem. Cheers, Diana!