| = somewhere, KKS | Veronica Valeanu [13.Mar.10 18:41] |
| KKS there are some mistakes - the correct version: the blanket hangs heavily left overs of long waits; the night has just deserted me the morning wears an unwashed dress I made an effort through camouflaged quagmires having been solitude's friend carrying a whole host of sunken memories sometimes the past swears to itself with its silent anguish gazing at the purloined treasures my desires have inherited fanciful questions come to fore I walk together with my past ahead of me I wonder when this past will run out and morning will wear a new dress you like to chose your words, to measure their intensity if chained together. you can try reaching further, though. from intense thoughts to seducing the language itself of the speech delivered by your message. the intensity could increase and you might like that! | |
| = Improvement | Kuldeep Kumar Srivastava [14.Mar.10 04:50] |
| Thank you. You have improved it. | |