= killed | Veronica Valeanu [26.Jul.10 10:59] |
i think there are too many cliches: [my heart is burning,mysterious feeling] but also as leitmotifs (rain, soul's quest for love, lost love). these have been used millions of times before. the voice has no strength, it only extols the helplessness. | |
= To Veronica Valeanu | Andreea Maresi [26.Jul.10 16:41] |
I know that it is not a so good poem...It is made in a moment of lack of inspiration.. But then, I felt that I have to write something. And after I finished, I thought that it would be well if somebody tells me an opinion or gives an advice. Thank you for telling me. I will rectify some parts of it in a moment of more inspiration. | |
= Edited | Andreea Maresi [29.Jul.10 11:48] |
I rectified some parts of this poetry. I hope that it is a little better. Thanks | |